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LadyTevar · Post by **LadyTevar** » Sun Aug 17, 2008 5:37 pm

I told you it would work out right.

A nice teaser, now give us more

LadyTevar · Post by **LadyTevar** » Sun Aug 17, 2008 6:51 pm

Ask and I receive, I see.

And I didn't notice the Italics formed a mini-poem in the story! Well done!

LadyTevar · Post by **LadyTevar** » Mon Aug 18, 2008 5:39 am

The only word that comes to mind is "Wow"

Because there are no more words to describe how that made me feel.

Post by **B4UTRUST** » Mon Aug 18, 2008 10:23 am

The purpose behind part four I owe to GenHavoc. Thanks for inspiring what to write next.

rhoenix · Post by **rhoenix** » Tue Aug 19, 2008 9:17 pm

Layers, upon layers, within layers - very nicely done, it obviously took you some time. I really like the style and the story, and await more.

rhoenix · Post by **rhoenix** » Wed Aug 20, 2008 3:37 pm

You're getting better at embedding poetry within essays, while losing none of their impact. It's a difficult thing to show a downward spiral of drugs and self-hatred into a thing of beauty, but you've somehow managed to.

Let's see some more - I want to see where you go with this.

LadyTevar · Post by **LadyTevar** » Wed Aug 20, 2008 5:30 pm

The most addictive drug is her....

Wow.. I love the imagery, the poetry.
And you thought you couldn't write

LadyTevar · Post by **LadyTevar** » Tue Sep 23, 2008 8:11 pm

Holy shit!

That was just....... AWESOME!

LadyTevar · Post by **LadyTevar** » Sun Feb 28, 2010 11:56 am

Very nice start, very film noir

tell us more

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