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[LadyTevar]

Glad to have you here

You should have listened to Marina sooner

[frigidmagi]

A very good start man.

Although...

Calpurnius zi Gorrag Thais Pia, herself a Knight-Commander of the Order, and an accomplished fighter, usually felt utterly insignificant in the presence of her liege lady. Calpurnius Isis Kerena, Lieutenant Admiral of the Order, sister to the head of the Great House Calpurnius, the hero of the campaigns against the Pceu, the greatest operational commander of the Imperium in over a century, was, literally, larger than life. Standing well over 2 meters tall, she towered over most of her subordinates. Her features were the product of 3 millennia of genetic engineering that neither time, nor the calamities of the Fall could destroy, and were without flaw. Her movements were both graceful and precise, thanks to her restructured muscles and life-long training. She was a member of the High Nobility, the few hundred individuals among the trillions of the Imperium, who lucky enough to retain the blessings of the Dual Emperor’s genetic enhancement programs. She was one of humanity’s most powerful psychics. She was, in a word, perfect.

Is it me or is the lady a bloody Space Marine?

And a nuke for an assassination attempt? Most unsubtle.

[fgalkin]

A very good start man.

Although...

Calpurnius zi Gorrag Thais Pia, herself a Knight-Commander of the Order, and an accomplished fighter, usually felt utterly insignificant in the presence of her liege lady. Calpurnius Isis Kerena, Lieutenant Admiral of the Order, sister to the head of the Great House Calpurnius, the hero of the campaigns against the Pceu, the greatest operational commander of the Imperium in over a century, was, literally, larger than life. Standing well over 2 meters tall, she towered over most of her subordinates. Her features were the product of 3 millennia of genetic engineering that neither time, nor the calamities of the Fall could destroy, and were without flaw. Her movements were both graceful and precise, thanks to her restructured muscles and life-long training. She was a member of the High Nobility, the few hundred individuals among the trillions of the Imperium, who lucky enough to retain the blessings of the Dual Emperor’s genetic enhancement programs. She was one of humanity’s most powerful psychics. She was, in a word, perfect.

Is it me or is the lady a bloody Space Marine?

She is based on a certain character from a famous space opera series.. Which is why she didn't even make it to the first chapter :D

And a nuke for an assassination attempt? Most unsubtle.

But on the plus side, try getting the assassin's fingerprints NOW :)

Have a very nice day.
-fgalkin

[frigidmagi]

Alrighty, you got me. I'm interested. What the hell did you do the world Fima?

[fgalkin]

Well, first I've unleashed a fairly literal interpretation of Revelations on it and then other things happened. What sort of things? You'll just have to wait and see.

Have a very nice day.
-fgalkin