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LadyTevar · Post by **LadyTevar** » Sat Jan 05, 2008 10:23 am

Oh dear... is Nalifan actually starting to worry about his new student's abilities? My my... he always does pick the dangerous playmates.

Cynical Cat · Post by **Cynical Cat** » Sat Jan 05, 2008 10:25 am

LadyTevar wrote:Oh dear... is Nalifan actually starting to worry about his new student's abilities? My my... he always does pick the dangerous playmates.

I could always start writing my female characters like Sansa Stark . . .

LadyTevar · Post by **LadyTevar** » Sat Jan 05, 2008 10:50 am

You'd kill her off in the first chapter, because she's such a useless, whiny, helpless ditz.

LadyTevar · Post by **LadyTevar** » Sat Jan 12, 2008 12:37 pm

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There's more to this than just 'I need to find a present'. Sunni's up to something, I just know it.

LadyTevar · Post by **LadyTevar** » Fri Jan 18, 2008 6:28 pm

Another great chapter, Cat.

LadyTevar · Post by **LadyTevar** » Mon Feb 04, 2008 12:39 pm

You would post the next chapter when I have no cablemodem!

LadyTevar · Post by **LadyTevar** » Wed Feb 06, 2008 3:11 pm

"Good. Enough moping over might have beens. Let's enjoy the wedding so Elvarra can continue glaring daggers at you and I can dream up some truly extortionistic demands for the Elven Court to choke on."

"You get far too much enjoyment out of the simple things, Nal."

frigidmagi · Post by **frigidmagi** » Wed Feb 06, 2008 3:51 pm

So in order to break this line of Tev comments.

I think she should just get to it and say it. Not to mention she should have mentioned the Elf court's willingness to pay him to stop looting Myth Drannor first not the "but it's our irreplaceable elfy hertiage!" thingy. Course if they really had treasure to burn, they should have asked about buying back some of the goodies. That should only take what? 5.7 McDuck Moneybins of money and magic?

Cynical Cat · Post by **Cynical Cat** » Wed Feb 06, 2008 4:41 pm

Can I get your reasons for this frigid? Because normally one tends to err on the side of the former sex slave when it comes to privacy, not her rapist.

LadyTevar · Post by **LadyTevar** » Thu Feb 07, 2008 8:22 am

Cynical Cat wrote:Can I get your reasons for this frigid? Because normally one tends to err on the side of the former sex slave when it comes to privacy, not her rapist.

Not to mention Kaeryn gave her word not to tell him.

frigidmagi · Post by **frigidmagi** » Thu Feb 07, 2008 11:31 am

Not to mention Kaeryn gave her word not to tell him.

You know, I missed that part, so yeah it would be best not to tell him. But if she's not going to tell him she better damn well stop dropping hints that's gonna make him feel like he needs to start checking things.

an I get your reasons for this frigid? Because normally one tends to err on the side of the former sex slave when it comes to privacy, not her rapist

The comment was ill thought out, I will attempt to better convey what I was thinking.

Making dance around the bush comments with a arch mage like Nal in this situation is like thwacking a unstable nuclear bomb. Odds are nothing is going to happen, but why on earth would you take the risk in the first place? If you're going to keep your mouth shut (which given the promise this apprantely sloppy magi completely missed is what should happen) keep your damn mouth shut. Don't ask leading questions, don't subtly imply things and for the Love of God don't get him thinking on his past. So when dealing with something and someone like this you either weld your mouth shut on the topic and don't refer to it even by the vaguest of means or you straight out say it and get the cards on the table for bargaining/fighting/whatever the fuck.

She's just luckly that the mage is completely distracted with the wedding and the new toy/apprentice that he won't likely think about that... For Now. Who can say what he'll start thinking when the distractions die now and he starts going "Hey, the High Priestess was acting just a tad weird... Maybe I should dig around."

I think the last thing anyone in the story wants is Nal thrashing around for answers when there are so many breakable things around. You know, his ex-victim, the locals, any near by cities or mountains...

Right now the hint dropping is the worse of all worlds.

Does that help?

Cynical Cat · Post by **Cynical Cat** » Thu Feb 07, 2008 11:33 am

Yes, it does. Of course, the other thing about his past which Kaeryn might ask him if he regrets is torpedoing their relationship and burning down half of Westgate. She does have "cover" on this issue.

frigidmagi · Post by **frigidmagi** » Thu Feb 07, 2008 11:46 am

I am not sure it is a good idea to rely on any cover in this kinda thing. Well hopefully it should work out.

LadyTevar · Post by **LadyTevar** » Thu Feb 07, 2008 11:47 am

Mystra knows Kaeryn's got regrets on that one... *sigh*
But the fact that children were passing by when she asked the question was mere coincidence, and no reason for Nal to be suspicious.

I would like to see more sly interplay between the former and current lovers, btw. Kaeryn would admit without hesitation that the drow princess was better suited to Nalifan ... but for his heresy. Mystra finds him amusing.

aleph nought · Post by **aleph nought** » Mon Feb 11, 2008 5:18 am

I've a feeling that Nalifan is gonna be pretty pissed off whenever he finds out about his daughter and remembers this exchange.

Just of curiosity, what would be his reaction if he found out now? Take his daughter with him to the manor, leave her with her mother, or hide her far, far away?

LadyTevar · Post by **LadyTevar** » Fri Feb 22, 2008 9:42 pm

I just love the dialogue between Trizk, Nal, Kaery, and Sylv.

LadyTevar · Post by **LadyTevar** » Sat Feb 23, 2008 9:38 pm

Hopefully Nal or someone felt that portal open.

LadyTevar · Post by **LadyTevar** » Wed Feb 27, 2008 6:33 am

Nicely said, Nalifan... now go save her before she's Beholder-chow.

Although, An amusing idea would be for Kaeryn to save her

LadyTevar · Post by **LadyTevar** » Mon Mar 03, 2008 9:44 pm

That was actually a very smart move to get out of the Beholder's cone. I doubt many could do that.

So, shit is meeting fan. How long til the next chapter?

LadyTevar · Post by **LadyTevar** » Tue Mar 04, 2008 8:05 pm

You were in a hurry with this one, hon, and it shows.

a marrow corridor

Narrow, you mean? Several places seem to have missing words as well.

LadyTevar · Post by **LadyTevar** » Tue Mar 25, 2008 11:56 am

Is Elvarra wanting thos poor males killed horribly?

LadyTevar · Post by **LadyTevar** » Wed Mar 26, 2008 8:32 am

Heh... and after I sent you that long list of typos, you still missed a few.

Its = It's
Here = Hear.

Cynical Cat · Post by **Cynical Cat** » Wed Mar 26, 2008 8:41 am

LadyTevar wrote:Heh... and after I sent you that long list of typos, you still missed a few.

Its = It's
Here = Hear.

Single words without even the surrounding sentence. Are you trying to be useless and annoying or are you naturally gifted in this area?

Don't bother me with this shit unless you're going to be helpful.

LadyTevar · Post by **LadyTevar** » Wed Mar 26, 2008 8:52 am

Cynical Cat wrote:
LadyTevar wrote:Heh... and after I sent you that long list of typos, you still missed a few.

Its = It's
Here = Hear.
Single words without even the surrounding sentence. Are you trying to be useless and annoying or are you naturally gifted in this area?

Don't bother me with this shit unless you're going to be helpful.

I see you woke up on the wrong side of the bed this morning.

Since you asked, may I point you the very first sentence of the Chapter: "its casing removed and its internals spread", to show you where the typos are. I see you've found the other and corrected it.

Lub you. Cya.

Cynical Cat · Post by **Cynical Cat** » Wed Mar 26, 2008 9:02 am

Lady T wrote: I see you woke up on the wrong side of the bed this morning.

Single context words don't fucking help at all and if you had a god damn brain you would know that. I've told you before that this shit is useless.

Since you asked, may I point you the very first sentence of the Chapter: "its casing removed and its internals spread", to show you where the typos are. I see you've found the other and corrected it.

Not a typo. Possessive "its" is correct. "It's" is a contraction for "it is". Not only does context help you find the alleged typo, it can actually determine if the typo actually exists.

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