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Okay... we have me, here, Narsil, the great, wise, merciful and generally bullshitting one with the fiery avatar And I am ready, of course, to take an amount of negative commentary as you see fit, just please make it constructive.
EDIT:
LadyTevar's own thread has brought it to my attention that it would be a good idea to, y'know, post links to my fics:
Curse of the Amethyst
A Wee Epic set in the Forgotten Realms. Unfortunately, a summary beyond that would be spoiler territory and/or overly complicated. And I despise overly complicated summaries, I also suck at making them. In progress.
Trials of the Mind **ABANDONED**
An abandoned D&D fic, you are free to take this fic's characters, plot and work with them yourself at creating your own version. Or I could possibly salvage some plot/characters from this one. Perhaps by implementing them as side-characters in Curse of the Amethyst... hmm.
The Crimson Chronicle *Now Under Continuance*
Ah yes, my old vampire fic. The characters and plot are going to be revised a bit from the original idea, and it's now under continuance rather than being abandoned as it originally was. Ah well; returning to a forum near you in a few days if all goes to plan.
Star Wars: Colours of the Force
My attempt to do a remake of the Jedi Academy series. Loosely. Essentially: the Jedi Academy series sans the KJA bullshit. Such as Exar Kun, the Sun Crusher, Kyp Durron, Daala, et cetera.
Extermination
The Daleks invade the Empire!
And that's all I've written previously and posted on here. Save for Lamentations which was a bloody joke at best and a pathetic attempt at writing at the worst. I do honestly feel embarassed at its creation.
EDIT:
LadyTevar's own thread has brought it to my attention that it would be a good idea to, y'know, post links to my fics:
Curse of the Amethyst
A Wee Epic set in the Forgotten Realms. Unfortunately, a summary beyond that would be spoiler territory and/or overly complicated. And I despise overly complicated summaries, I also suck at making them. In progress.
Trials of the Mind **ABANDONED**
An abandoned D&D fic, you are free to take this fic's characters, plot and work with them yourself at creating your own version. Or I could possibly salvage some plot/characters from this one. Perhaps by implementing them as side-characters in Curse of the Amethyst... hmm.
The Crimson Chronicle *Now Under Continuance*
Ah yes, my old vampire fic. The characters and plot are going to be revised a bit from the original idea, and it's now under continuance rather than being abandoned as it originally was. Ah well; returning to a forum near you in a few days if all goes to plan.
Star Wars: Colours of the Force
My attempt to do a remake of the Jedi Academy series. Loosely. Essentially: the Jedi Academy series sans the KJA bullshit. Such as Exar Kun, the Sun Crusher, Kyp Durron, Daala, et cetera.
Extermination
The Daleks invade the Empire!
And that's all I've written previously and posted on here. Save for Lamentations which was a bloody joke at best and a pathetic attempt at writing at the worst. I do honestly feel embarassed at its creation.
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Yes you do! WRITE MORE!Narsil wrote:I had nothing better to do at the time.LadyTevar wrote:Didn't take you long, did it? :)
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#8
It's promising. Keep it going.
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Man had always assumed that he was more intelligent than dolphins because he had achieved so much: the wheel, New York, wars while all the dolphins had ever done was muck about in water having a good time.
But the dolphins had always believed that they were far more intelligent than man for precisely the same reasons
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Man had always assumed that he was more intelligent than dolphins because he had achieved so much: the wheel, New York, wars while all the dolphins had ever done was muck about in water having a good time.
But the dolphins had always believed that they were far more intelligent than man for precisely the same reasons
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First Point: Thank you kindly for the feedback.
Second Point: It's in the wrong place, mate, my commentary thread is up near the top, stickied here
Third Point: This is what sums up my opinion of that oncoming Dark Horse Comic; "LALLALALALALALALA NOT LISTENING... LALALALALA DIDN'T HAPPEN!!!" So... yeah.
Second Point: It's in the wrong place, mate, my commentary thread is up near the top, stickied here
Third Point: This is what sums up my opinion of that oncoming Dark Horse Comic; "LALLALALALALALALA NOT LISTENING... LALALALALA DIDN'T HAPPEN!!!" So... yeah.
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Nice poem.
[img=left]http://i10.photobucket.com/albums/a116/ ... vilwar.jpg[/img]Dakarne: That's no moon...
Dakarne: it's London.
Thank god for Tennessee Harold Ford protecting us from nuclear vegemite. - Petrosjko
Major Reilly: Air Command
"They can shoot me dead, but the moral high ground is mine" - The Doctor
Dakarne: it's London.
Thank god for Tennessee Harold Ford protecting us from nuclear vegemite. - Petrosjko
Major Reilly: Air Command
"They can shoot me dead, but the moral high ground is mine" - The Doctor
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Re: To Fade in the Shadow
Pretty interesting, I'll wait to see where this goes.
Pretty interesting, I'll wait to see where this goes.
[img=left]http://i10.photobucket.com/albums/a116/ ... vilwar.jpg[/img]Dakarne: That's no moon...
Dakarne: it's London.
Thank god for Tennessee Harold Ford protecting us from nuclear vegemite. - Petrosjko
Major Reilly: Air Command
"They can shoot me dead, but the moral high ground is mine" - The Doctor
Dakarne: it's London.
Thank god for Tennessee Harold Ford protecting us from nuclear vegemite. - Petrosjko
Major Reilly: Air Command
"They can shoot me dead, but the moral high ground is mine" - The Doctor
#19
I'm quite pleased by this setup for Fade, excellent little introduction. Do continue with it.
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#20
Glad you finally got around to continuing Fade. My only humble complaint though is that it just seems... short, about half the length of Ch. I. Perhaps shoehorning in some more dialogue, or adding more words to whatcha already got would help, if ye don't mind my suggesting.
And though I naturally already know a fair amount about the plot, it makes me wonder when the Red Lady (YES, I know you French-ized her name, but 'Red Lady' is short and to the point ) or Valdy is gonna start jerking the chains of Demika's brother? Like, is he just rotting in her dungeon, or do they have a... shall we say, deeper motive behind his capture? Perhaps related to the ritual she mentioned?
And though I naturally already know a fair amount about the plot, it makes me wonder when the Red Lady (YES, I know you French-ized her name, but 'Red Lady' is short and to the point ) or Valdy is gonna start jerking the chains of Demika's brother? Like, is he just rotting in her dungeon, or do they have a... shall we say, deeper motive behind his capture? Perhaps related to the ritual she mentioned?
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#21
I demand that you focus all your efforts on producing more.
[img=left]http://i10.photobucket.com/albums/a116/ ... vilwar.jpg[/img]Dakarne: That's no moon...
Dakarne: it's London.
Thank god for Tennessee Harold Ford protecting us from nuclear vegemite. - Petrosjko
Major Reilly: Air Command
"They can shoot me dead, but the moral high ground is mine" - The Doctor
Dakarne: it's London.
Thank god for Tennessee Harold Ford protecting us from nuclear vegemite. - Petrosjko
Major Reilly: Air Command
"They can shoot me dead, but the moral high ground is mine" - The Doctor
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Fool! Everyone knows you can't get edible food in Britain unless you're in London, in which case it's Indian or Chinese or something.
[img=left]http://i10.photobucket.com/albums/a116/ ... vilwar.jpg[/img]Dakarne: That's no moon...
Dakarne: it's London.
Thank god for Tennessee Harold Ford protecting us from nuclear vegemite. - Petrosjko
Major Reilly: Air Command
"They can shoot me dead, but the moral high ground is mine" - The Doctor
Dakarne: it's London.
Thank god for Tennessee Harold Ford protecting us from nuclear vegemite. - Petrosjko
Major Reilly: Air Command
"They can shoot me dead, but the moral high ground is mine" - The Doctor
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#23
Narsil... I'm not sure about the new Dr Who you're writing. That just doesn't -sound- right for the Tom Baker Doctor. The whole tone of voice, his reactions to Abigail... I don't know. It's just OFF somehow. :(
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Because it isn't the Fourth Doctor - he's merely a future form of the Doctor (probably the Eleventh) who liked the outfit and had a burst of nostalgia. While all of the existing forms never really had that kind of nostalgia, there's no one saying that he can't regenerate into one which does. I was wondering when someone would comment on it, to be honest.LadyTevar wrote:Narsil... I'm not sure about the new Dr Who you're writing. That just doesn't -sound- right for the Tom Baker Doctor. The whole tone of voice, his reactions to Abigail... I don't know. It's just OFF somehow. :(