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#1 Author Feedback: Bloody Good
Posted: Fri Jun 01, 2007 9:53 pm
by Bloody Good
Hero Work is an ongoing bit of fiction I've been writing for a while. Every few months, I get inspired and write some more. Most of the characters are based loosely on someone I know, and I've found that it makes writing for them a bit easier.
#2
Posted: Sat Jun 02, 2007 6:33 pm
by LadyTevar
The main problem I see is that you need to remember to make each line of dialog a new paragraph. Stuffing two people's voices into one paragraph makes it very hard to follow.
Otherwise, the story pulled me in and I wanna see more.
#3
Posted: Sat Jun 02, 2007 11:12 pm
by Bloody Good
Well, the formatting went to shit when I copied and pasted from Word Pad, but I'll edit it back up to par eventually.