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Posted: **Tue Aug 21, 2007 10:08 pm**

Go ahead! I can take it!

*whimpers in a corner*

Posted: **Tue Aug 21, 2007 10:15 pm**

Good story.

Posted: **Wed Oct 10, 2007 10:13 pm**

This 'second chapter' I'm not so proud of. It just never seemed to come out quite like I wanted it too... Ah well.

Posted: **Wed Oct 10, 2007 10:20 pm**

This is good stuff - if you plan on writing more, I look forward to reading it.

Posted: **Wed Oct 10, 2007 10:25 pm**

I'm very glad that Crimson manages to stay on his Good Side... and that Overload is around often enough to make sure there IS a Good Side

Posted: **Tue Dec 04, 2007 4:26 pm**

I liked your three short stories, and you're inspiring me to take a creative writing course myself.

I liked the flow of the stories, the cadence, the description, and the subtle fleshing-out of the characters. My one small complaint is a technical one, and one I can recognize because I do the same thing myself - string together too many parts of a sentence with commas, instead of making a new sentence.

Don't feel bad though - given your third short story, you already caught it and are working on it as a writer.

Posted: **Tue Dec 04, 2007 5:25 pm**

Damn.

Thats all I can say hon.

Posted: **Tue Dec 04, 2007 7:01 pm**

Regarding the first story (I have not read the rest yet):
I... don't think there are enough descriptions in there. I can't even tell if Matt's earlobes are rounded and dangle a little or connect to his head in a direct line. Sheesh.

Posted: **Wed Dec 05, 2007 9:13 am**

rhoenix wrote:I liked your three short stories, and you're inspiring me to take a creative writing course myself.

I liked the flow of the stories, the cadence, the description, and the subtle fleshing-out of the characters. My one small complaint is a technical one, and one I can recognize because I do the same thing myself - string together too many parts of a sentence with commas, instead of making a new sentence.

Don't feel bad though - given your third short story, you already caught it and are working on it as a writer.

Actually that third one is the first that I wrote for the class. But yeah the long sentences is a minor issue I have had for awhile.

Posted: **Mon Feb 11, 2008 8:01 am**

...................
Now I know why you say mad wizards are dangerous.

Posted: **Mon Feb 11, 2008 4:02 pm**

^^^Don't underestimate the dragons either...^^^
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Awesome--I was hoping I'd get to see what happened there and then

Posted: **Mon Feb 11, 2008 4:48 pm**

Damn dude.

Posted: **Mon Feb 11, 2008 6:12 pm**

Wow - that's some serious high-level magic there. For a wizard to pick a fight with a dragon who's apparently that powerful, his flaw must have been pride - after all, he was forced to kill them both to win.

Posted: **Mon Feb 11, 2008 8:14 pm**

But the wizard didn't pick a fight. He was just looking for his 'birdie'... that happened to fall on top of the dragon and shatter.

The dragon picked the fight, then. The wizard just finished it.

Posted: **Mon Feb 11, 2008 9:02 pm**

LadyTevar wrote:But the wizard didn't pick a fight. He was just looking for his 'birdie'... that happened to fall on top of the dragon and shatter.

Yeah, that looked like a complete accident. Sure.

Posted: **Mon Feb 11, 2008 9:26 pm**

rhoenix wrote:
LadyTevar wrote:But the wizard didn't pick a fight. He was just looking for his 'birdie'... that happened to fall on top of the dragon and shatter.
Yeah, that looked like a complete accident. Sure.

The world may never know.

*goes back to writing other stories, or lazing about, much more likely the second*

Posted: **Wed Mar 31, 2010 4:02 pm**

Great Glitch story :)

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