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I honestly knew it would be virtually impossible to justify the timeline of S4W8 so I decided it was best to not explain it all, just leave things open for the imagination. As for the OKW surviving, I suspect the long term takeover helped them cement a place in the State; it's probable that the OKW's forces are for dealing with external threats while the SS is focused on eliminating threats to "Purity" and the Reich. They don't like the OKW existing but there are too many party leaders who prefer to keep the OKW alive as a counter to the SS to ever fully eliminate them. That division will play a role in the seasons to come.

I'm glad you liked it in the end. I wanted to do something special with the introduction of the Reich, and I think I succeeded.

You may or may not like 1-04. It's essentially Doc Leo going hardcore, and a first contact with another known sci-fi setting.

As for Power of a Name.... yes, I'm gonna put Korra back. :razz: She'll have a few new ideas for Firebending, grant you...

Edit: Actually... if she was gone then Unalaq can't open the spirit portals. Harmonic Convergence won't work and free Vaatu. Everything would be fine!
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No, you put Korra back after you deal with the Zombies. BTW: Zombies have to have a 'heartbeat' for them. There should have been a master necro nearby with a drummer.
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Yeah, the plan is to have Korra help deal with them.

Yeah... Korra, Harry Dresden, Karrin Murphy, and the Doctor versus Zombies. This story is weird.

Further episodes will get weirder.

I'd actually forgotten the entire thing about the drumbeat as being completely mandatory with no other possibilities. It won't make things broken, though. Especially when we find out what's powering this...
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We saw in "Dead Beat" that it could be as simple as the Necromancer tapping a rythym with his fingers against his leg, to a car stereo blsting hip-hop, to the One Man Band that ran Sue.
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I'm trying to remember how close they have to be and if it requires more power to do it from a distance.
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NORMALLY... it'd have to be "within hearing"
What you did make a HUGE difference. *shudder*

And now Korra and The Doctor in front of the Council. Bloody Hell.
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There's a reason the story is called "A Bad Day".

So, any thoughts on the power source for the zombie-making? :twisted:
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That was very sad. Poor kid.
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Since I was helping DarkSilver test the character limits and such, I went ahead and added nUF 1-05 a week early for my strong and massive fanbase on LibArc (That is, frigidmagi). :cool:

Undoubtedly this is where Tevar frowns and threatens to get the baseball bat if I don't get back to work on "Power of a Name". :shock:
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It's ok. I'm too sick to feel up to doing anything.

Still, poor kid. He just wanted to be with his family.
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Well, Bad Day was kinda depressing at some points, so the new Short should give us some needed laughs.

I am having far too much fun writing the SI Doctor/Harry Dresden banter.
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Anyone who knows the plots and elements of Chrono Cross and looks at Episode 4's title knows what I'm about to do.

And since we're not told anything exact about the results of that... burning incident in-game, why not? :twisted:
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CRONOCROSS?!?!? Of all the games in the 'verse, you pick that twisted unlikeable piece of shit? But you're gonna burn it down, right? Or The Doctor is.
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LadyTevar wrote:..................
CRONOCROSS?!?!? Of all the games in the 'verse, you pick that twisted unlikeable piece of shit? But you're gonna burn it down, right? Or The Doctor is.
Well, maybe not the whole game, but let's just say the Doctor will get to mock the catman a bit and, uh.... I don't wanna spoil.

Oh, did you like the Dinner Date short? Or the bone I threw to, uh, a certain fandom when I had them talking at those purple cliffs at the last world they'd seen? :cool:
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When you get up, Tev, I hope you enjoy the marathon run, I wrote the entire episode today. And now to collapse in bed for work tonight. Hopefully my congestion keeps clearing up.
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Loved the bone you threw, yes. Surprised you didn't add a joke about only apples to eat. ;)
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My knowledge of that setting is heavily lacking, since it's almost all from little memes I've picked up or the two SFDebris reviews (Technically three, since he split up the season 2 premiere review into a two parter to match it's two parts). The only thing I could think of was the emphasis on them being friendly and Rainbow Dash having a non-existent understanding of the concept of speed limits. Granted, that is inferred because, again, not a watcher of the show.

I'm curious as to what you thought of Episode 4 as a whole?
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Episode 04 was a good and tense one, although the crew is becoming something of a magic solve settings problem button in some cases. Might want to watch that. In this case though it was a close one. Getting Leo out front and center more is a good idea. I like the Sudanese nurse and hope to see more of her. I'm also glad that this episode advanced both the plot arc and the metaplot with our favorite Not-a-Jedi.

Episode 05 I'm less keen on, partly out of well... I'm not that sympethic to Zack here. Look if this was highschool that would be one thing, but you're a grown up now and fuck you've even been a number of fights and scrapes. Man up, either talk to the girl like an adult or let it the fuck go. If you have to, leave and get some space so you can work things out for yourself. Don't get me wrong, it's not that I'm rolling my eyes at his problem it's that I find a man who's willing to lead and command others being so... Passive and immature about this kinda grating. There are certain flaws that make sense, Robert's for example (although I also roll my eyes at "oh we can't get together! What if it didn't work, our friendship which we have declared to be unbreakable, would be ruined" Self serving nonsense)and there are others that make you sigh and wish the characters would grow the fuck up already.

You want to deal with interpersonal problems? How about dealing with the fact that has a bunch of buddies they also have to balance professionalism. Cat would get her ass reamed on any other ship that isn't commanded by her older sister's ex-boyfriend. Pouting, whining and wheedling are generally not considered acceptable behaviors and this should be confronted before Cat gets singed. I actually like her as a character but if they're officers now, they're gonna have to act like it and she isn't. I also wish that the actual Mass Effect stuff could have taken a more leading role, but only if you could do it without stealing Commander Shepard's thunder. Which I know is kinda of a conflicting set of desires.

The ending while interesting, brings up a question, okay misses I'm totally a AI impression of a person despite having only 5 minutes of memory to work from is now a vital intelligence resource. Something came along and destroyed a culture. Add in the story of the Mass Relays (built by a culture that suddenly vanished!) and you have an emerging pattern. This should be something that rings alarm bells.

So... You planning on getting back to the Nazis? Cause you kinda dangled an entire Story there in front of me and walked away.

Dr. Who: Never read Harry Dresden, so the wizard council comes off as a bunch of over reaching dicks who deserved 4 servings of Korra to the face. Also, they basically stealth browbeated a boy into suicide. No fuck that, that was murder. So they're babykillers. Fuck them.

Never played Crono Cross I was "HEY IT'S LUCCA! I REMEMBER HER! HI LUCCA! YOU'RE AWESOME! What's that, these other people? Don't know 'em, don't care... HEY IT'S CHRONO AND HIS WIFE, DUDE! YOU RULE!" To be fair if it was me, half the places I could drag you no one would have ever heard of so fair is fair.

The dinner with Kira was nice. You should go on a bar crawl with both Kirks just for shits and giggles.
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frigidmagi wrote:Episode 04 was a good and tense one, although the crew is becoming something of a magic solve settings problem button in some cases. Might want to watch that. In this case though it was a close one. Getting Leo out front and center more is a good idea. I like the Sudanese nurse and hope to see more of her. I'm also glad that this episode advanced both the plot arc and the metaplot with our favorite Not-a-Jedi.
Given that the first three episodes had Robert, Julia, and Zack getting the most focus, I wanted to vary it up. And the story fit Leo to a T, showing us his virtues and his flaws.

I do not intend to undo everything I disliked about various settings but to make the "solve problem" thing pop up only when it's a reasonable outcome to the changed situation.

The plot with Lucy playing around with her Force powers will be showing up through the next several installments.
Episode 05 I'm less keen on, partly out of well... I'm not that sympethic to Zack here. Look if this was highschool that would be one thing, but you're a grown up now and fuck you've even been a number of fights and scrapes. Man up, either talk to the girl like an adult or let it the fuck go. If you have to, leave and get some space so you can work things out for yourself. Don't get me wrong, it's not that I'm rolling my eyes at his problem it's that I find a man who's willing to lead and command others being so... Passive and immature about this kinda grating. There are certain flaws that make sense, Robert's for example (although I also roll my eyes at "oh we can't get together! What if it didn't work, our friendship which we have declared to be unbreakable, would be ruined" Self serving nonsense)and there are others that make you sigh and wish the characters would grow the fuck up already.
Zack is... a fundamentally lost character. His willingness to lead and command is tied up entirely in how much he enjoys flying the Koenig and, at this point, he would probably be happier if he were just the pilot officer of that ship. This story was conceived at the start as exploring his unrequited love for Julia and how he deals with the obvious fact that she's not going to go for him. It would be healthier and smarter if he manned up to it and admitted it, willing to accept rejection... but he's not to that point yet.

He will get there though. After he matures more. And suffers more. He's going to come off as the Chief O'Brien of nUF in woobieness: every year there will be a mandatory "ZACK MUST SUFFER" episode, MWAHAHAHAHAHAHA.

Okay, that's an exaggeration... to an extent. :twisted:
You want to deal with interpersonal problems? How about dealing with the fact that has a bunch of buddies they also have to balance professionalism. Cat would get her ass reamed on any other ship that isn't commanded by her older sister's ex-boyfriend. Pouting, whining and wheedling are generally not considered acceptable behaviors and this should be confronted before Cat gets singed. I actually like her as a character but if they're officers now, they're gonna have to act like it and she isn't.
Part of Cat's character arc is the fact she has to mature. I even touched on the issue you've brought up in 1-01 where Locarno points out to her that in this field you have to follow orders and if you don't like it, you resign your commission.

Our sweet little Cat will have a lot of growing up to do in the next couple of years.
I also wish that the actual Mass Effect stuff could have taken a more leading role, but only if you could do it without stealing Commander Shepard's thunder. Which I know is kinda of a conflicting set of desires.
I suppose it slightly undermined the gravitas of the ME first contact by making it the B plot in a story centered on Zack's personal issues. I thought the juxtaposition would prove interesting though. Episode 1-13 will bring us back and give us a more normative first contact-style story.

The ending while interesting, brings up a question, okay misses I'm totally a AI impression of a person despite having only 5 minutes of memory to work from is now a vital intelligence resource. Something came along and destroyed a culture. Add in the story of the Mass Relays (built by a culture that suddenly vanished!) and you have an emerging pattern. This should be something that rings alarm bells.
It will. But there are always going to be... complications. :twisted:

If you check the years, then, well, I'll list it out now since it's not a big deal. Mass Effect 1's storyline is mid-season 3 of this series, with ME2's timeframe being mid-season 5 and ME3 being the first half of Season 6. A lot is gonna happen in that timeframe. A-bloody-lot.
So... You planning on getting back to the Nazis? Cause you kinda dangled an entire Story there in front of me and walked away.
1-07 will bring us back to S4W8.
Dr. Who: Never read Harry Dresden, so the wizard council comes off as a bunch of over reaching dicks who deserved 4 servings of Korra to the face. Also, they basically stealth browbeated a boy into suicide. No fuck that, that was murder. So they're babykillers. Fuck them.
The Council is brutally strict. If you break a law of Magic you die, except if clemency is granted under only very specific criteria. And even then it comes with the Doom of Damocles.

It's not a good thing about them. It's the result of centuries of seeing warlocks develop because a little taste of black magic leads to corruption which drives more tastes, and on. Better Dead Than Warlock, essentially. Even if it means cleaving off an adolescent or young teen's head. Keep in mind they almost executed Harry at age 16 for violating the First Law - Thou shalt not kill with Magic - even when he did so in self-defense. That it was in self-defense barely convinced enough of the Council to accept his being given to Ebenezer McCoy for training with the Doom of Damocles placed upon him.
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Heh.
The dinner with Kira was nice. You should go on a bar crawl with both Kirks just for shits and giggles.
Ha!
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A final note. In the original conception of Ep 3, Dustin didn't die but went along with the proposal, moving to Air Acolyte Island and implied to go on to be happy in the end.

But then I looked at the title and thought "That ending really doesn't fit the title, does it?" So we instead are reminded that the Doctor Doesn't Save Everyone.

Of course, this sets us up for "Always Tomorrow".... :cool:
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When EveryBody Lives, it's time for the Doctor to Dance.

I hope that Princess Katerine grows up like Madame Pomadore, loving 'her' Doctor and wanting to see him many times. I always wanted to punch the face of the A-hole who decided to make her a villian and break the future that could have been. Pity they can't trace the assassin to ComStar and Wyndo.
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I am at war with myself on the issue. I can't have him change everything, after all.

Well, more accurately, seeing you say that has me considering that alternative to my original plan of "nudging doesn't work". It would make for supreme irony.
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Nudging can work... or it can *really* work and take things too far the other way. There's a real fun one to think about.
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Oooooh yes, hahahahaha.
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Well, okay, I have a Cunning Plan for this story and it even will fit into the mysteries of the entire story's run. But yes, this is gonna be nuts. VERY nuts.
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McGee total shock, its' THE DOCTOR. Then the Jedi babe comes out, and gets both him AND Tony.
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