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LadyTevar · Post by **LadyTevar** » Wed Jun 07, 2006 12:22 pm

Feedback thread for SharkBait.

LadyTevar · Post by **LadyTevar** » Wed Jun 07, 2006 12:23 pm

Speaking of feedback... I think you've got a great start. What happens next?

Shark Bait · Post by **Shark Bait** » Wed Jun 07, 2006 12:58 pm

LadyTevar wrote:Speaking of feedback... I think you've got a great start. What happens next?

Well go look and see, had to hold off on the next part so I could clean up some of it, and I still managed to mess up and had to edit my post twice

EDIT: oh and a special thanks to magi for his help with some of the dialogue in the bar.

frigidmagi · Post by **frigidmagi** » Wed Jun 07, 2006 1:21 pm

Not a problem, I'm enjoying this story.

LadyTevar · Post by **LadyTevar** » Wed Jun 07, 2006 2:33 pm

Gee... that sounds like a couple stories I've heard from Marine buddies about stupid Army recruits..

Must be nice if the drop captain can sleep with the Mobile Armor captain. ;)

Shark Bait · Post by **Shark Bait** » Wed Jun 07, 2006 3:36 pm

You know there was actually a bit of discussion on that one, eventually frigid and I figured that since they are exactly in the same chain of command really was not a problem. Aditionally you will see how this has to do with the over all immage of the MAD in comparison to the rest of the fleet.

Shark Bait · Post by **Shark Bait** » Thu Jun 15, 2006 3:30 pm

edited and updated part 3

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