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Wife of SirNitram, LeigeLady of the BlackMages and the only one they truly fear. One of the three Moderators of this forum, and a voracious reader of fantasy and fan-fics. However, I have written in the past, and will write more as the mood strikes me.
Revealations from a Certain Point of View
My first fic in this forum, based loosely on events from the now-defunct AOL chatRPG BlackBayou. Written as pages in a journal from mother to daughter.
Revealations: Cycle's End: Continuing the story, this time from the new generation as they attempt to close the cycle for good.
Revealations from a Certain Point of View
My first fic in this forum, based loosely on events from the now-defunct AOL chatRPG BlackBayou. Written as pages in a journal from mother to daughter.
Revealations: Cycle's End: Continuing the story, this time from the new generation as they attempt to close the cycle for good.
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Finally read through Revelations. Interesting stuff, well written. Though not my favourite style of writing (I've never been one for Diary-entry style fiction), I personally enjoyed it and here's looking forward to the sequel
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#4
So far so good on the first chapter of the new Revelations story Tev...
nice set up for the next chapter.
nice set up for the next chapter.
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"Then again, Detective....how often have you dreamed of hearing your father's voice once more? Of feeling your mother's touch?" - Ra's Al Ghul
"According to the Bible, IHVH created the Universe in six days....he obviously didn't know what he was doing." - Darek Steele bani Order of Hermes.
DS's Golden Rule: I am not a bigot, I hate everyone equally. | corollary: Some are more equal than others.
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#5
Ok... there is a problem. Something in the chapter is screwing with LibArc's format and redirecting me to the HomePage. I posted the three sections of the chapter, but one section based around Leena cannot be posted at all.
Truthfully... it's not as important a section. The story is fine without it. If you want to read the full chapter, as I intended, please go to SDnet FanFiction to read the chapter there.
Oddly enough, SDnet had no trouble with it.. just LibArc. :(
EDIT:
Ok... this is NOT even funny. The whole reason it was redirecting seems to involve three little words.
Fetch
the
car.
That's it. When I changed the sentence to "shall I get the car for you" it went perfectly.
Truthfully... it's not as important a section. The story is fine without it. If you want to read the full chapter, as I intended, please go to SDnet FanFiction to read the chapter there.
Oddly enough, SDnet had no trouble with it.. just LibArc. :(
EDIT:
Ok... this is NOT even funny. The whole reason it was redirecting seems to involve three little words.
Fetch
the
car.
That's it. When I changed the sentence to "shall I get the car for you" it went perfectly.
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Man someone got a hotheaded son.
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Considering what all the Father got into, he's reaping what he sowed. ;)frigidmagi wrote:Man someone got a hotheaded son.
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Tevar, I'm just half way in your first story. I'm..I can't stop reading.
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Mayabird:You see what this place does to us? It's like how Eskimos have their 16 names for snow. We have to precisely define what shafting we're receiving.
"Do we think Israel would be nuts enough to go back into Lebanon with Olmert still in power and calling the shots? They could hook Sharon up to a heart monitor and interpret the blips and bleeps as "yes" and "no" and do better than that, both strategically and emotionally."
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Dorsk 81: this is why I support the separation of Aces eyebrow's, something that ugly should never be joined
Mayabird:You see what this place does to us? It's like how Eskimos have their 16 names for snow. We have to precisely define what shafting we're receiving.
"Do we think Israel would be nuts enough to go back into Lebanon with Olmert still in power and calling the shots? They could hook Sharon up to a heart monitor and interpret the blips and bleeps as "yes" and "no" and do better than that, both strategically and emotionally."
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Ace Pace wrote:Tevar, I'm just half way in your first story. I'm..I can't stop reading.
Thank you! You have no idea how good that makes me feel
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Sorry I haven't had a chance to get around to reading it before - but Revelations pt.2 is turning out to be rather interesting. I didn't read the first story due to my slight distaste for reading diary-entry style fiction, but that is a flaw of mine and not of the story itself.
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Starting the second fic now. Bravo. It was tense.LadyTevar wrote:
Thank you! You have no idea how good that makes me feel
This is actully the first fiction I've read on SDN and LA in a while.
[img=left]http://www.libriumarcana.com/Uploads/Ace/acewip7.jpg[/img]Grand Dolphin Conspiracy
The twin cub, the Cyborg dolphin wolf.
Dorsk 81: this is why I support the separation of Aces eyebrow's, something that ugly should never be joined
Mayabird:You see what this place does to us? It's like how Eskimos have their 16 names for snow. We have to precisely define what shafting we're receiving.
"Do we think Israel would be nuts enough to go back into Lebanon with Olmert still in power and calling the shots? They could hook Sharon up to a heart monitor and interpret the blips and bleeps as "yes" and "no" and do better than that, both strategically and emotionally."
The twin cub, the Cyborg dolphin wolf.
Dorsk 81: this is why I support the separation of Aces eyebrow's, something that ugly should never be joined
Mayabird:You see what this place does to us? It's like how Eskimos have their 16 names for snow. We have to precisely define what shafting we're receiving.
"Do we think Israel would be nuts enough to go back into Lebanon with Olmert still in power and calling the shots? They could hook Sharon up to a heart monitor and interpret the blips and bleeps as "yes" and "no" and do better than that, both strategically and emotionally."
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Why? The birth certificate I stole the name from didn't have it hyphenated either Besides, I *like* SeanEric. If Nitram and I do spawn a boy-child, that's what I'm naming him. SeanEric KeithNarsil wrote:I've only just gotten up to Chapter Six, but it's looking like a damn good story so far, my only suggestion is possibly hyphenating SeanEric so it's more like Sean-Eric...
But if that's your only complaint, I must be doing *something*
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Ah well, I suppose it's my being used to hyphenated names rather than directly adding one name onto the end of another one sans the hyphen ... Ah well, I suppose it's my personal experience with hyphenated names - like my ownLadyTevar wrote:Why? The birth certificate I stole the name from didn't have it hyphenated either Besides, I *like* SeanEric. If Nitram and I do spawn a boy-child, that's what I'm naming him. SeanEric KeithNarsil wrote:I've only just gotten up to Chapter Six, but it's looking like a damn good story so far, my only suggestion is possibly hyphenating SeanEric so it's more like Sean-Eric...
I've just finished it, and you need to do something else: write more!But if that's your only complaint, I must be doing *something*
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I'm figuring out the next chapter in my head, hon. The Hotoros will figure prominately.Narsil wrote:I've just finished it, and you need to do something else: write more!LadyTevar wrote:But if that's your only complaint, I must be doing *something*
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Aye, it's always a fucking pain in the arse to do the next chapter, and often seems like much worse than the last. I'm sure there's a law of quantum physics somewhere which makes that a universal truth..I'm figuring out the next chapter in my head, hon. The Hotoros will figure prominately.
Oh and this:
... made me chuckle."Tahalshia Manor, this is Nitram. If you're wanting to speak to my daughter Elizabeth, press 1. If you're wanting to speak to Blackthorne's daughter Jhelian, press 2... and god help you. If you're wanting to speak to the twins, press 3. If you're female and wanting SeanEric or Shadrick, press 4 and get in line. If you're actually wanting to speak to an adult, press 9."
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*twitch*
Must...write.....more......
Having known many of these characters, I NEED TO KNOW WHAT'S GOING ON!
btw, does Ryu know you killed him off *eg*
Dev
Must...write.....more......
Having known many of these characters, I NEED TO KNOW WHAT'S GOING ON!
btw, does Ryu know you killed him off *eg*
Dev
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It was Ryu-mun's suggestion :-DDevonie wrote:*twitch*
Must...write.....more......
Having known many of these characters, I NEED TO KNOW WHAT'S GOING ON!
btw, does Ryu know you killed him off *eg*
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Damn... these chapters are getting harder to write! I thought this one would never get written!
I wonder if I really can wrap this up believably within 20 chapters... :sad:
I wonder if I really can wrap this up believably within 20 chapters... :sad:
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#24
Tev, my dear, darling sister... I do realize you lost some more stuff when the new harddrive died, but if you do not post another chapter soon, I am going to show up at your apartment, lock Nit in the bedroom and chain you to your computer .. and I'll place Pepsi and Pocky just outta your reach until you finish the next chapter...
DO YOU UNDERSTAND?!?!?!?!?
*huggles*
BTW, I miss you!
Dev
DO YOU UNDERSTAND?!?!?!?!?
*huggles*
BTW, I miss you!
Dev
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I might need that kick in the pains, sister dear. I can't get anything to work out. I've tried writing the start of the next chapter all week.. and I've been unable to do more than two sentences.
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