Feedback for Ra
Moderator: LadyTevar
#26
Posted another part to Star, here. Fucking post some commentary people! Would it hurt to give feedback in a feedback thread?
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#27
Forgive me, Ra... I only just had the time to sit down and read what you have so far in "Star".
It's very good, the action's well done, and the story flows smoothly. The characterization is compelling, and I look forward to see who's saved her and why.
It's very good, the action's well done, and the story flows smoothly. The characterization is compelling, and I look forward to see who's saved her and why.
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#30
Thanks. 
I'd been eager to write some sort of planewalking affair, since I, as well, love the Planes.
I'd been eager to write some sort of planewalking affair, since I, as well, love the Planes.Jonathan McKenzie
Half-Insane Snakehead | MSPaint Acolyte | Wierd TGOD'er
"Every time you stay abstinent...Kitten kills a god."
Half-Insane Snakehead | MSPaint Acolyte | Wierd TGOD'er
"Every time you stay abstinent...Kitten kills a god."