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Sunhawk · Post by **Sunhawk** » Wed Sep 19, 2007 11:56 am

Magi finally twisted my arm, so I'm here now as well. Steve has been posting most of my stuff lately, but I didn't see Triple Threat up, so I've posted it now that it is complete.

And yes, I'm a newb when it comes to writing, any and all feedback is really appreciated, even of the 'that SUCKS' variety

LadyTevar · Post by **LadyTevar** » Wed Sep 19, 2007 12:25 pm

Do more than 10 asterix for a scene shift again, and I will hurt you. It broke the formatting, so I had to go into your post and remove all the extra asterix.

PS: The last scene with them in the maintainence closet got cut off. Might want to either edit it, or remove it for a new thread as you continue the story.

And I highly suggest continuing the story. I'm hooked.

Sunhawk · Post by **Sunhawk** » Wed Sep 19, 2007 4:52 pm

It did get cut off, and I was so tired when I posted that I didn't notice! I posted the rest into the reply, and it *looks* like it worked fine.

Sorry about the asterix, when I looked at the preview it looked fine, I editted the rest of the demarqs to 10.

And I'm glad you are enjoying it!

frigidmagi · Post by **frigidmagi** » Wed Sep 19, 2007 5:38 pm

I enjoyed the story. It had a good Shadowrunny feel and the characters were fun. I hope to see more of them someday. I also hope to see more of your writings.

LadyTevar · Post by **LadyTevar** » Wed Sep 19, 2007 5:56 pm

Mr Johnson is always a sneaky bastard, no matter what genre.

I loved it... although you should have had at least one of the other triplets enter the room with 'Anne', just to give Michael and Stephan a shock ;)

Mayabird · Post by **Mayabird** » Fri Sep 21, 2007 1:30 pm

Everything is better with swivel chairs.

I liked the story. It was fun, even if there were no Zohan.

Steve · Post by **Steve** » Sun Sep 23, 2007 11:27 pm

Ed already has a couple more stories in mind for Anne, Annika, and Alicia. :) Plus they may be making an appearance in one of the core TGG fictions rather soon.....

I believe the next one he intends to do will be a prequel to Triple Threat that shows them operating as freelancers, and delve into their origins as well.

Sunhawk · Post by **Sunhawk** » Mon Sep 24, 2007 7:56 pm

Well, Triple Trouble has started, the prequel to Triple Threat. Hope you folks enjoy it as much!

frigidmagi · Post by **frigidmagi** » Wed Sep 26, 2007 2:32 am

I find this interesting, although I am wondering how the triplets are gonna take on a pirate crew with ship attached. I assume the suffering "ligit" pirates are gonna be allies, as they certainly want this band of madmax bandits gone.

frigidmagi · Post by **frigidmagi** » Tue Nov 13, 2007 5:25 pm

Sweet Lord in Heaven you gave the mass murdering gang rapist a warship!?!

Do you know what you can do with a warship even a clunky obsolete one?

Sunhawk · Post by **Sunhawk** » Tue Nov 13, 2007 7:01 pm

frigidmagi wrote:Sweet Lord in Heaven you gave the mass murdering gang rapist a warship!?!

Do you know what you can do with a warship even a clunky obsolete one?

Yes, yes I do. tum tum tum

Steve · Post by **Steve** » Sat Feb 02, 2008 12:32 am

Keep it coming Ed. I'm sure Magi and Tev will appreciate it.

frigidmagi · Post by **frigidmagi** » Sun Feb 03, 2008 4:10 pm

Pretty Humane Shadowrunner community there but it works.

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