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Typo Patrol.
I hope I'm giving you enough info to find them now. :wink:
"I say the beam scar. It wasn't Deathstrike

"Tired of being on Megatron's junk list. He moves the 'Cons away from any good fines while we clear them out.

Deathstrike turned the corner and exited the line of fire."
Those two, separate sentences both have normal typos, like the hanging quotation mark where there wasn't a quote. The next one's harder.
"We're almost done. No percentage is killing walking dead 'bots."
This sentence is missing something. No percentage IS killing? No percentage IN killing? What was supposed to be there?
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"I grow tired of drow failures. But if the knowledge of his bolt holes and Nalifan's truename don't interest you, please feel free to proceed without me."
Now that is a very terribly scary idea. True Name magic is bad on multiple levels. How the hell does Wither know the name?

Unless, as I've said before, it's Nalifan himself. :razz:

Either way, great chapter and just what I needed at this point.
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LadyTevar wrote: Now that is a very terribly scary idea. True Name magic is bad on multiple levels. How the hell does Wither know the name?
Wither isn't telling and neither am I.

Okay, I'm lying. Wither will be telling next installment.
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LadyTevar wrote: Now that is a very terribly scary idea. True Name magic is bad on multiple levels. How the hell does Wither know the name?
Wither isn't telling and neither am I.

Okay, I'm lying. Wither will be telling next installment.
SQUEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!
When's that update? :lol:
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LadyTevar wrote: SQUEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!
When's that update? :lol:
Probably sometime tonight.
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Even if Wither is Nalifan, which I doubt, that wouldn't mean he'd automatically know Nalifan's truename. Most creatures don't, at least not mortals. He'd have had to go to some effort to find out no matter who it is.
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Rogue 9 wrote:Even if Wither is Nalifan, which I doubt, that wouldn't mean he'd automatically know Nalifan's truename. Most creatures don't, at least not mortals. He'd have had to go to some effort to find out no matter who it is.
The Roguish one is correct. A small hint. Wither has great magic and possessions intimately connected to Nalifan.
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Warriors comment: This is gonna get really messy.
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Warriors has one typo... and it's the first sentence, so if you don't find it it's not my fault :razz:
clipped the last of Scutter's servomotor relays and put the down the clippers on the table beside me. "Repair systems are offlined, movement and communication systems disabled."
But other than that, this is about to get Really Damn Good. Somehow I doubt there will be a truce called to beat up on the pirates... but I do wonder if we'll get the classic scene of two sworn enemies protecting each other's backs 'until the pirates are gone'. After all, both BreakOut and DeathStrike are very honorable that way.
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Why does he want Nal's companions alive?

The answer he gives is just too damn pat. Something's fishy there.
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So... what is the Twilight Imperium, Cat?

Although you get a +1 for leonine aliens. :wink:
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Yep, Warriors got messy.

And I am glad to see the Shadowrun fic. Are the runners gonna go for blood?
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Oh damn... The Autobots had me on the edge of my seat!

Until I saw these typos
The renegade leader was standing in a large, subsurface by watching drone modules load the belly of cruiser with energon and rare metals.
By = Bay?
Sparks and smoke come from the wounds as a tear out my knife. I stab him in the chest and push.
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Twilight Imperium fan fiction! YAY! :grin:
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The twin cub, the Cyborg dolphin wolf.

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Mayabird:You see what this place does to us? It's like how Eskimos have their 16 names for snow. We have to precisely define what shafting we're receiving.

"Do we think Israel would be nuts enough to go back into Lebanon with Olmert still in power and calling the shots? They could hook Sharon up to a heart monitor and interpret the blips and bleeps as "yes" and "no" and do better than that, both strategically and emotionally."
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Awwwwwwwwwww... Poor Glitch!

All looks bad for Our Heros.
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*APPLAUDS, Whistles, Waves Flags*

Great job, and a great story. I'm sorry to see Warriors end... but I'm sure you've more ideas percolating and waiting their turn.
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Other than the nitpicking I did in IMs, the new one is a great start!
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You know, that's something I've wanted to do to many a kleptomaniac shorty character over the years, but never got to. :lol: Why's it always the gnomes and halflings? Human rogues just never seem to be compulsive thieves, certainly not with the frequency of halfers. :razz:
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Those knots had better be tight, if they really want Kuuni to stay put :lol:

And that's -very- interesting knowledge about the spell-gaps. Gaps are targets and weak points.
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Well well... This makes things interesting.

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Damn... he's on the BadGuys side again?

Pity... DeathStrike was a lot of fun
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LadyTevar wrote:Damn... he's on the BadGuys side again?

Pity... DeathStrike was a lot of fun
I wouldn't go that far. Not yet. Remember, he's loyal to Megatron.
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My goof (hitting edit instead of quote to respond to Lady T) edited for simplicity's sake.

The Predacons are old in at least one Transformer continuity. Of course there are so many and so many of them are loaded with stupid shit . .
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Glad we got that straightened up, Cat. :lol:

Either way, I like the idea of Predaking as an Autobot War Hero, who then went Decepticon. Were they Smashed, or went willingly? So many new directions that can go! :wink:
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